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    The Hooded Kings (Subnixus)

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    The Hooded Kings (Subnixus)

    Post by helo frens on Thu Jun 28, 2012 7:03 am

    Hello people~

    This is my story set in Kerna, one of the most powerful countries in Subnixus.

    The story follows a certain time period, well before the events of BZPB. Characters from Subnixus involved in BZPB will not exist yet in this story (Apart from Guardians, spirits etc.)


    Just posting the intro to the first chapter for now.

    Chapter #1, Intro: Bull of the flames.

    People be callin' me Bull.

    Bull of the flames. Bull the vigilante.

    What do I -like- ta' be called? Well. If you be wonderin' that, you be wonderin' too far. Talk ta' people I've worked for an' you'll know all that I am.

    I ain't of the kernian race. When people be seein' me they jus' look at the horns. Think I'm a foreigner. I've lived in this country longer than I've been able to read an' write.

    But who I am don't have no significance compared to the stuff that be happenin' recently.

    The relationship b'tween Kerna and the Nharvardian Resistance be growing shadier. Much shadier even than it used to be. Used to be jus' the occasional bad trade or the occasional criminal group crossin' over the border. But now the two are hardly communicatin'.

    Our 16th king is the greatest damn king we've had yet. Always be thinkin'. Always be listenin' to the people. Recently people be sayin' that in his next speech, he's gonna show the people his face.

    I dunno what to believe 'bout that, but I do know that if anyone knows how t' keep war from brimmin', and even if it does, how to win it, it's gonna be him. Imma be there for the speech, you can be sure of that.

    I sure as hell honour the king and the kings of old. More than half of the people who call 'emselves kernians.

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    Re: The Hooded Kings (Subnixus)

    Post by Klak on Thu Jun 28, 2012 7:04 am

    Nice set up, and nice beginning. Glad Subnixus is finally coming back!


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    Re: The Hooded Kings (Subnixus)

    Post by Ferret-X on Fri Jun 29, 2012 9:50 am

    Nice one! *thumbsup*
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    Re: The Hooded Kings (Subnixus)

    Post by Kon on Fri Jun 29, 2012 9:57 am

    Nice introduction, I think you really set the scene well and established the character of "Bull" with this. Not bad. :notbad:

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    Re: The Hooded Kings (Subnixus)

    Post by Zev the Reveler on Sat Jun 30, 2012 8:04 am

    I remember you sending me this to look over, and I still like it.

    You do an excellent job of building the setting, while still from the perspective of a single character (for the time being? :O), and I love your portrayal of Bull.

    I'm excited to read more of this! :3

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